This form of poetry is called a ghazal, (pronounced "guzzle"), and consists of many rhyming couplets, not obviously connected.
Of course they are connected, otherwise we would have what we in the trade like to call "complete and total screwed-up nonsense", but they are connected much less blatantly than tradition english stanza poetry.
Anyways, history lesson aside, here goes.
Home away from home
People in cardboard box towns,
Buried in cardboard caskets in the ground,
People collapsed and folded into briefcases
in their own hands on escalators forever going down
White line code written on bathroom stall walls
Spelling out trash can fires dusted in brown
Rusted tin soldiers wearing moth-eaten coats
and hobo glove crowns
Empty three-piece-suits doing
only what the television tells them is allowed
Assembly-line rebels
marching in time with the crowd
Deaf homeless with canes
hearing voices through the ground
Flight plan laid world
turning backwards around
Hmmm nice!
ReplyDeleteI like what you did with the rhyme scheme, it's unusual for ghazals as far as I understand them. But it really helps to tie it together.
My favourite is the couplet about briefcases...it really struck home.
I confess total ignorance about ghazals - except what Thomas taught me in 'Waiting for Columbus'. And now you.
ReplyDeleteThe rhyme scheme is lovely, though it is much stronger near the end then at the beginning.
"Empty three-piece-suits" really struck a chord for me - the message was clear.
AWESOME !
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